Wednesday, May 16, 2007

Appointment with love -- The conclusion

Kindly read the following plot first:

http://cursed-soul.blogspot.com/2006/06/appointment-with-love.html

My version of its end:

Blandford stood stunned for a moment before reality came rushing to him. He felt he was being made to live someone else's life. Without waiting to register the happiest moment he had yet lived, Blandford dashed out of the Central, forgetting to thank the smiling woman and parting his way roughly through the crowd on the platform. Swifter than any aircraft he had worked with, Blandford ran in the direction he had seen Hollis go, temples pounding in excitement, adrenalin rushing to paralyze his senses. No, he could not hear, feel or see.. All he wanted was to get to Hollis.. fast.. faster and then he would decide what to do next. In a few seconds, he was out of the Grand Central.

Four minutes past six. The smiling waiter seated Hollis on the two seater table facing the huge glass window through which Hollis could see nearly the entire main crossing. Cars following each other, probably carrying people heading home after a day's work. The outside was slowly being bathed in gold as the sun bid adieu.. Had the woman told him yet? Had Blandford backed out like any other man would do, when he believed the old woman was Hollis? Every part of her wanted him to get through the test, seek her, come to her and the rest of the evening would be magical. If things went right, so would the rest of their lives..

He could see the restaurant outside the gate. Darting on the pavement, Blandford reached the main crossing. Cars were plying by.. the usual evening traffic. Now, fifty yards separated Hollis and him, fifty longest yards he had walked. 'God make this fast', he prayed.

And then he saw Hollis. Seated behind a glass window facing the crossing, she was looking directly at him. Blandford felt blood prick as it flowed along his temples and his throat went dry. Almost constantly, they smiled. He could feel Hollis' eyes gripping him, pleading him to climax the seeming endless wait. Finally, the signal on the crossing changed and Blandford took three steps across the road, the eye contact unbroken. He had barely managed to see the big black blur from nowhere speeding his way, when he felt his insides freeze. The smile had not quite left his lips... his eyes still open, Lieutenant Blanford fell.


Forty nine seconds later, Hollis saw Blandford's eyes close. In the few moments they had together, he had managed to mutter, 'I love you'.

18 comments:

vikram said...

cool yaar..foun u on orkut.. nice story.

orbitronvind said...

Nice ending Aks.....<:D>

Karry said...

Ah, moving.

Would ask you to read a similar article on my blog. Its called "Memories of Togetherness and Parting".

You might just like it.

Kavya said...

http://resonant-thoughts.blogspot.com/2006/07/memoriesof-togetherness-and-parting.html

missj said...

nice post.. n nice template too.. :)

Akshata said...

^ Who is that now? Thanks :)

And I did not expect so many comments for this one. It was just timepass scribble. :D

Karry said...

If this is something you call "timepass scribble"....

*Does saashtaanga namaskara*
:P

Govil said...

Nice ending.

Wish it would be more happier, though.

And something like "....and they lived happily ever after".

Oh!Yeah that reminds of Shrek!!!
I know there is no connection .... Just live with it.

Nikhil said...

Not bad for a "timepass scribble"! :D
The pace of the narration is gripping to say the least and it almost made me feel for the characters,and that's saying something!I too had attempted to 'create' a similar conclusion but my version pales in comparision...
Great job!

Nisarg said...

I hate unhappy endings.

Arjun Bharadwaj said...

Tch...Tch.......

You sound like a sadist making Blandford die........just when he was about to mmet Hollis.......
If he dies, the story doesn't have a point, does it??

Akshata said...

It made all the difference in the world to me. :)

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